Issue 20 [b]"Most of the people we consider heroic today were, in fact, very ordinary [b]people who happened to be in the right place at the right time." [b][b][b]I agree with the statement insofar as our heroes tend to be ordinary people [b]like us. However,I strongly disagree with the further assertion that people [b]become heroes simply by being "in the right place at the right time." If we [b]look around at the sorts of people we choose as our heroes, we realize that [b]heroism has far less to do with circumstance than with how a hero responds [b]to it. [b][b][b]I concede that heroes are generally ordinary people. In my observation we [b]choose as our heroes people with whom we strongly identify--people who are [b]very much like us. In fact many of us call a parent, grandparent, or older [b]sibling our hero. Why? My intuition is that the more a person shares in [b]common with us----my terms of experience, heritage, disposition, motives, [b]and even physical attributes-----the more accessible that person's heroic [b]traits are to us, and the stronger their attraction as a role model. And [b]few would dispute that we share more in common with immediately family than [b]with anyone else. [b]这明显的又是一篇半让步式半反驳式文章。 [b]典型句子结构： [b]I concede that… In my observation…In fact… Why? My intuition is that... [b]然后用渐强式句子来强调原题观点的正确： [b]The more… the more…, the more… [b]Few would dispute that… [b]但，在第二段就正式进入反驳并衍生观点了：However, the statement's further [b]suggestion that…is simply wrongheaded. [b][b][b]However, the statement's further suggestion that people become heroes [b]merely as a result of circumstances not of their own choosing is simply [b]wrongheaded. Admittedly, circumstance often serves as a catalyst for [b]heroism. After all, without wars there would be no war heroes. Yet this [b]does not mean that we should lionize （把……视作名人）every member of the [b]armed forces. I find quite telling the oft-used idiom "heroic effort," [b]which suggests that mere coincidence has little to do with heroism. If one [b]examines the sorts of people we select as our heroes, it becomes evident [b]that heroism requires great effort, and that the very nub（=key point） of [b]heroism lies in the response, not in the circumstance. [b]精华：If one examines … it becomes evident that… [b]the very nub of… lies in … not in… [b][b]Consider the ordinary person who overcomes a personal obstacle through [b]extraordinary effort, fortitude, or faith---thereby inspiring others toward [b]similar accomplishments. Sports heroes often fall into this category. For [b]example, Lance Armstrong, a Tour de France cycling champion, became a [b]national hero not merely because he won the race but because he [b]overcame a life-threatening illness, against all odds(=smooth away all [b]obstacles), to do so. Of course, widespread notoriety(=fame) is not a [b]requisite for heroic status. Countless individuals with physical and mental [b]disabilities become heroes in their community and among their acquaintances [b]by treating their obstacles as personal challenges--thereby setting [b]inspirational examples. Consider the blind law student who inspires others [b]to overcome the same challenge; or the amputee distance runner who serves [b]as a role model for other physically challenged people in her community. To [b]assert that individuals such as these become our heroes merely by accident, [b]as the statement seems to suggest, is to completely misunderstand the very [b]stuff of which heroes are made. [b]精华：… often falls into category [b]To assert that…, as the statement seems to suggest, is to completely [b]misunderstand the very stuff of which heroes are made. [b][b][b]Another sort of hero is the ordinary person who attains heroic stature by [b]demonstrating extraordinary courage of conviction--against external [b]oppressive forces. Many such heroes are champions of social causes（社会事 [b]业）, rising to heroic stature by way of the courage of their convictions; [b]and, it is because we share those convictions--because we recognize these [b]champions as being very much like us----that they become our heroes. Such [b]heroes as India's Mahatma Gandhi, America's Martin Luther King, South [b]Africa's Nelson Mandela, and Poland's [b]Lech Lawesa come immediately to mind. None of these heroes was born into [b]royalty or other privilege; they all came from fairly common, or ordinary, [b]places and experiences. Or consider again our military heroes, whose [b]courage and patriotism in battle with the statement would serve to [b]completely discredit as merely accidental outcomes of certain soldiers [b]being “in the right place at the right time." I think the preposterousness [b]of such a suggestion is clear enough. [b][b]Powerful sentences: It is because… because… that … [b]I think the preposterousness of such a suggestion is clear enough. [b][b][b]In sum, the statement correctly suggests that heroes are ordinary people [b]like us, and that opportunity, or circumstance, is part of what breeds [b]heroes. However, the statement overlooks that serendipity alone does not a [b]hero make. Heroism requires that "heroic effort," or better yet [b]a "heroic response," to one's circumstances in life. [b][b]最后，作者例行总结了自己的观点，间接向阅卷者传递了一个完美的信息： [b]作者的最终观点是：heroism is also made of another two prerequisites: [b]1. personal efforts against all odds similar or greater to other ordinary [b]peoples [b]2. outstanding responses towards those obstacles [b]但，我认为，作者还可以特别阐释一下heroism，这样就不会让整篇文章头重脚轻了。这篇文 [b]章符合5分标准的，但不大可能拿到6分，因为作者在论辩过程还是在内容深刻度方面略微欠 [b]缺了。即使是，也是匆匆带过。 [b]