ISSUE 16"Although many people think that the luxuries and [b]conveniences of contemporary life are entirely harmless, [b]in fact, they actually prevent people from developing into [b]truly strong and independent individuals." [b][b]************************* [b][b]In our modern times, we, especially the urban population, [b]are enjoying the luxurious and convenient lives provided [b]by our industrial society. Ironically, we encounter much [b]difficulty in developing ourselves into truly strong and [b]independent personalities in the modern "harmless" life. [b][b]Modern technology acts as the extensions of human [b]beings' arms, legs and brain. But the advanced technology [b]results in a warm bed where the idleness breeds. The modern [b]transport facilities shorten the distance and save the time [b]for us. We fly across the giant ocean, we run through the [b]continent by train and we drive the cars to anywhere we [b]prefer. However, people are gradually addicted to the [b]convenience and speed of these transport machines. We are [b]unwilling to go on foot even though it is not necessary to [b]take a car instead of walking. It makes us complain to take [b]a several minutes' walking. We are not physical infirm, but [b]spiritually. [b][b]The only thing that modern people need to do is to keep [b]following the social system. The industrial essential [b]principle is trying to seek the maximum efficiency. The [b]machines, given birth to by us, work all day and night [b]without any tiredness. Everything runs according to the [b]mechanical schedule in order to obtain an industrial maximum. [b]In many enterprises, the computer arranges the daily schedule [b]for both machines and human. As a tiny gear in a giant machine, [b]we have to admit all what we should do is just doing as we are [b]told. It seems unnecessary to ask "WHY". Gradually, we'd rather [b]follow the way directed by others. [b][b]The life style is just a catalyst of preventing us from truly [b]strong and independent individuals. Mainly, The attitudes one [b]has of life and his personality guide himself. In a biological [b]lab, a strong frog is placed in a pot filled with cool water. [b]When the stove under the pot is kindled and the flame is [b]controlled to the extent in which the small fire is licking [b]the bottom of the pot mildly. The frog enjoys staying in the [b]pot while ignoring the water temperature is warmer and warmer. [b]Finally, the frog loses its life peacefully without any struggle. [b]As the small fire keeps licking our frog's comfortable pot, the [b]luxury and convenience are wearing our motivations down. [b][b][b]We should realize the potential danger following the modern life. [b]Instead of blaming the luxurious and convenient outside, one [b]should set up a proper attitude to life and personality development. [b](400 words) [b][b][b]stautshi 评价： [b]文笔上没问题。没什么错误，但是我总觉得中心不是很突出 [b]第一个论述段和第三个论述段感觉有点重复，都是在说 [b]舒适与方便慢慢磨掉了人的意志。第二段说的是人渐渐 [b]失去了自我的主张，但是应该再强调一些。 [b][b]还有啊，我觉得第一段，你自己的观点提出时，最好不要用原 [b]题里面的字，甚至照搬几个句子，最好用自己的语言写出来。 [b][b]还可以增加这些内容： [b]现代生活的信息太统一，没有个性，最突出的例子就是所有女性都 [b]减肥，都认为骨感是美，而非常少的人能做到外形有个性。 [b]现在的工作方式让绝大多数人成为高度精密的部件，能够 [b]很好完成交给的任务，但是缺少innovative的想法。