此文由yy-summer提供，beckyyee点评。更多GRE作文讨论请进入寄托家园GRE作文专栏 [b]http://www.gter.net/bbs/forumdisplay.php?s=&forumid=23 [b]----------------------------------------------------------------------- [b]Universities should require every student [b]----------------------------------------------------------------------- [b]Should student take a various of courses besides his own field? Nowadays [b]with the development of the society, more and more all-around developed [b]person are needed, so I strongly hold that students should be encouraged to [b]take courses beyond their major. [b]In the first place, the separation of liberal arts and natural sciences in [b]present universities has become a barrier to true education for students. [b]As we know, in most of the universities, students who study liberal arts [b]know little about natural sciences, and the same with the natural science [b]students. For example, once a girl, whose major is law, has some trouble [b]with her computer, she may ask a student who study computer for help. This [b]is the disadvantage of the present education. [b]In the second place, by exploring subjects outside their own major, [b]students may find new academic fields where lie their real interest and [b]potential gift. Many of the students don’t like their majors and can’t do [b]well in them, because when they chose the major before they entering the [b]university, they were only about 18 year old and they didn’t know [b]themselves clearly. But if the university would offer various courses [b]beyond their own majors, they will find their real interest and do well in [b]it. Otherwise, their potential will be deserted. [b]Finally, since various academic disciplines are interrelated, the study of [b]courses outside the students’ own field may benefit the study of their own [b]major. You may feel surprise why does some companies like to hire people [b]who is major in mathematics instead of computer. The reason is if one has a [b]excellent base of mathematics, his ability of designing procedures will be [b]better than those we only study computer. So no matter what your major is, [b]you should have a wide reading of other field in order to promote your own [b]field. [b]To conclude, only through wide study of various courses, can a student [b]become truly educated. [b]我的第一篇gre作文，position是按提纲来写的，望各位多多指教。 [b][b]-------------------------------------------------------------------- [b]以下是beckyyee的点评 [b]____________________________________________________________________ [b]建议想点自己的观点，不要一点都不变的按书上的提纲写。 [b][b]我觉得第一篇能写成这样，已经很不错了。 [b][b]结构很清晰，句式也有一定的变化。但不足之处在于没有具体的事例。word都用的太 [b]simple, 可以把其中的一些词语换成更文学化的词。第二个观点的的论证不到位，应该介绍 [b]这样的好处而不是原因。第三个观点论证的句子太少。 [b][b]仅供参考！ [b]