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GRE作文范文与写作要领—issue问题
寄托考试站 [http://exam.gter.net]   2004-12-02 22:54 PM   《新东方英语》

       Issue作文是一篇典型的议论文。要拿到高分,务必做到如下四点:

      (1) 论点明确。Issue是一个有争议的问题,必须采取自己的立场,可以同意、反对,也可以有保留地同意或反对,在少数问题上也可以只是评价不同观点的得失。不管怎样,必须有一个态度,而且必须在文章的开头明确陈述。

       (2) 结构合理。必须确保文章有完整的开头、正文、结尾,而且各部分分工明确,上下连贯。结构与立场、论证的角度、策略有直接的关系,集中体现在正文各段落之间的逻辑关系上。

       (3) 论据充分。Issue文章关键是以理服人,应通过多样化的证据来说服读者,而不是大话连篇,空话连篇。

       (4) 语言通顺。文章必须体现句式多样化,必须使用更多的复杂句式。不过,也不必太谨小慎微,少数不严重的语法错误并不会影响你拿到高分。

      例题:“In our time, specialists of all kinds are highly over-rated. We need more generalists-people who can provide broad perspectives.”

范文:
6分作文
In this era of rapid social and technological change leading to increasing lie complexity and psychological displacement ,both positive and negative effects among persons in Western society call for a balance in which there are both specialists and generalists.
Specialists are necessary in order to allow society as a whole to properly and usefully assimilate the masses of new information and knowledge that have come out of research and have been widely disseminated through mass global media. As the head of Pharmacology at my university once said (and I paraphrase):“I can only research what I do because there are so many who have come before me to whom I can turn for basic knowledge. It is only because of each of the narrowly focused individuals at each step that a full and true understanding of the complexities of life can be had. Each person can only hold enough knowledge to add one small rung to the ladder, but together we can climb to the moon”. illustrates This the point that our societies level of knowledge and technology is at a stage in which there simply must be specialists in order for our society to take advantage of the information available to us.
Simply put, without specialists, our society would find itself bogged down in the Sargasso sea of information overload. While it was fine for early physicists to learn and understand the few laws and ideas that existed during their times, now, no one individual can possibly digest and assimilate all of the knowledge in any given area.
On the other hand, over specialization means narrow foci in which people can lose the larger picture. No one can hope to understand the human body by only inspecting one’s own toe-nails. What we learn from a narrow focus may be internally logically coherent but may be irrelevant of fallacious within the framework of a broader perspective. Further if we inspect only our toe-nails. What we learn from a narrow focus may be internally logically coherent but may be irrelevant or fallacious within the framework of a broader perspective. Further, if we inspect only our toe-nails, we may conclude that the whole body is hard and white. Useful conclusions and thus perhaps useful inventions must come by sharing among specialists. Simply throwing out various discoveries means we have a pile of useless discoveries, it is only when one can make with them a mosaic that we can see that they may form a picture.
Not only may over-specialization be dangerous in terms of the turth, purity and cohesion of knowledge, but it can also serve to drown moral or universal issues. Generalists and only generalists can see a broad enough picture to realize and introduce to the world the problems of the environment. With specialization, each person focuses on their research and their goals. Thus, industrialization , expansion, and new technologies are driven ahead. Meanwhile no individual can see the whole view of our global existence in which true advancement may man stifling individual specialists for the greater good of all.
Finally, over-specialization in a people’s daily lives and jobs has meant personal and psychological compartmentalization. People are forced into pigeon holes early in life (at least by university ) and must consciously attempt to consume external forms of stimuli and information in order not to be lost in their small and isolated universe. Not only does this make for narrowly focused and generally poorly-educated individuals, but it guarantees a sense of loss of community, often followed by a feeling of psychological displacement and personal dissatisfaction.
Without generalists, society becomes inward-looking and eventually inefficient. Without a society that recognizes the importance of broadmindedness and fora for sharing generalities, individuals become isolated. Thus, while our form of society necessitates specialists, generalists are equally important. Specialists drive us forward in a series of thrusts while generalists make sure we are still on the jousting field and know what the stakes are.

点评:
       这是一篇出色的作文,作者对总是的分析有独到的见解,论证严密,遣词准确、丰富,表现了作者对写作基本要素娴熟的驾御能力。作者不同意题目提出的观点,认为专才和通才都很重要:专才使我们在一个信息爆炸的时代免于堕落为平庸,而通才使我们有可能把握事物的整体,从而在一个专业分工的日益碎化的时代实现更大的整体利益。该文结构严密,论证有条理。作者对问题的各方面都进行了比较周密的探讨,并提出了有力的例证和理由来支持自己的前提,最后得出了一个令人信服的结论。该文的字数是625。从ETS的要求来看,GRE作文要想拿到高分,字数必须达到500字以上。

5分作文
Specialists are not overrated today. More generalists may be needed, but not to overshadow the specialists. Generalists can provide a great deal of information on many topics of interest with a broad range of ideas. People who look at the overall view of things can help with some of the large problems our society faces today. But specialists are necessary to gain a better understanding of more in depth methods to solve problems or fixing things.
One good example of why specialists are not overrated is in the medical field. Doctors are necessary for people to live healthy lives. When a person is sick, he may go to a general practitioner to find out the cause of this problems. Usually, this kind of “generalized” doctor can help most ailments with simple and effective treatments. Sometimes, though, a sickness may go beyond family doctors knowledge or the prescribed treatments don’t work the way they should. When a sickness progresses or becomes diagnosed as a disease that requires more care than a family doctor can provide ,he may be referred to a specialist. or instance, a person with constant breathing problems that require hospitalization may be suggested to visit an asthma specialist. Since a family doctor has a great deal of knowledge of medicine, he can decide when his methods are not effective and the patient needs to see someone who knows more about the specific problem; someone who knows how it begins, progresses, and specified treatments. This is an excellent example of how a generalized person may not be equipped enough to handle something as well as a specialized one can.
Another example of a specialist who is needed instead of a generalist involves teaching. In grammar school children learn all the basic principles of reading, writing, and arithematic. But as children get older and progress school, they gain a better understanding of the language and mathematical processes, the need to learn more and more specifics and details about various subjects. They start out by learning basic math concepts such as addition, subtraction, division, and multiplication. A few years later, they are ready to begin algebraic concepts, geometry and calculus. They are also ready to learn more advanced vocabulary, the principles of how all life is composed and how it functions. One teacher or professor can not provide as much in depth discussion on all of these topics as well as one who has learned the specifics and studied mainly to know everything that is currently known about one of these subjects. Generalized teachers are required to begin molding students at a very early age so they can get ready for the future ahead of them in gaining more facts about the basic subjects and finding out new facts on the old ones.

点评:
       该文对问题的复杂性进行了深入的分析。作者的立论基本两个十分典型、恰当的例证。该文第二段以医学领域为例展开讨论,指出在这一领域不仅需要专科医生而且需要通科医生。然后,为了说明自己的观点,作者把这一例子推进一步,指出在呼吸病领域对哮喘病专家的需要。这一从具体到一般的例证分析法在该文的第三段也有出色的运用。总之,该文结构合理,这部分是因为作者有效地使用了恰当的关联词,如but usually, for instance等等。

       该文虽然在语言方面总体表现不错,但有些明显的问题使该文不能进入6分之列。例如作者对代词的使用不准确,如“when a sickness progresses or becomes diagnosed……he may be referred to a specialist ”排比结构也有问题,如“……how it begins progresses and specified treatments”,有些语言也欠严密,如“Generalized teachers are required to begin molding students at a very early age so they can get ready for the future ahead of them in gaining more facts about the basic subjects and ……”

4分作文
The need for generalists is undeniable but one can not underestimate the need and importance of specialists. The medical profession is a good example of an area that requires both generalists and specialists, if there were no generalists in the profession there would be no one to help patients determine when a specialist was needed. There are certain problems that a general practitioner can take care of and there are other problems that are out of his or her league. The general practitioner is an appropriate place to start when a patient develops a problem. Many times the general practitioner is more than capable of handing problems that arise and other times he or she is unable to fully take control of the patient’s care. It isn’t a fault with the general practitioners. There is just too much to know for any one person to be an expert on all topics. It takes people years to become experts on a single topic, never mind being an expert on everything in the medical profession.
I am currently working in a large teaching hospital where the need for both general practitioners and specialists is obvious. When a patient is admitted to a general medicine floor, the general medicine physicians are not always able to deal with every problem the patient has without some help from the specialists. It would be unrealistic, not to mention unfair to the general practitioners, to expect the general practitioners to know everything about everything. The key is to know where everyone’s knowledge and area of expertise lie and use their strengths to optimize patient care.
On the general medicine team in which I worked, the team would constantly be requesting consults form specialists. Whether it be a renal, psychiatric, orthopedic, rehabilitation, speech, gastroenterologist or any other specialist, their input was constantly needed and used to get the patient well as quickly as possible. The list of specialists can go on longer than one would think and it is just impossible for one person to know everything about each one of them.
Although the need for generalists is apparent, it would be hard to survive without specialists, also. When a person acts as a generalist, they know little bit about everything, but certainly not a totally inclusive knowledge of everything. The specialist is there to help add the expertise and inclusive knowledge that the generalist may be lacking. The most important thing to remember with specialists and generalists is to recognize both’s strengths and weaknesses and capitalize on the strengths to achieve whatever goal may be desired.

点评:
       总体来看,该文有效地回应了题目的要求。作者不同意“专家过剩”的论点,认为专家和通才都需要。但作者只提出了一个例子来支持自己的观点,尽管作者对这个例子展开分析,探讨了医学领域里专才和通才的不同职责与贡献。遗憾的是,第三段写得平平,结尾段不过是对第一、二段的复述而已。

       该文满足了对语言的一般要求,但遣词不够恰当、准确。从上面的例文可以看出,要在ISSUE问题上拿到6分的确不容易。写作速度、内容、论证技巧和语言质量都向你提出了严峻的挑战。但别忘了俞敏洪老师的名言:从绝望中寻找希望,人生终将辉煌!

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